Agnieszka, I got a chuckle from your writing. It isn’t a salad if there’s no tomatoes, I completely agree about that. And a pet crocodile! Don’t want that guy getting out! Nicely done, keep writing!
I liked your use of quoted speech and adjectives to describe the food in your story, which tied together some of the prompt words nicely. Thanks for colouring them too. I was a bit anxious about what was going to happen in the loo – I was worried the crocodile might be flushed away! Keep up the great writing.
Mr. Page (Team 100 WC)
Mark Oliphant College, South Australia.
Agnieszka, I got a chuckle from your writing. It isn’t a salad if there’s no tomatoes, I completely agree about that. And a pet crocodile! Don’t want that guy getting out! Nicely done, keep writing!
Hi Agnieszka,
I liked your use of quoted speech and adjectives to describe the food in your story, which tied together some of the prompt words nicely. Thanks for colouring them too. I was a bit anxious about what was going to happen in the loo – I was worried the crocodile might be flushed away! Keep up the great writing.
Mr. Page (Team 100 WC)
Mark Oliphant College, South Australia.