A good start Ewan. I like the idea of you using pepper. The make the beginning part more exciting, I suggest you use powerful verbs.
Mr Maree
Very good Ewan. It was funny when you used the pepper. I suggest you check your spellings and don’t forget capital letter for I!!!! :]
Ewan you have some good sentence and you need to use full stops.
Well done Ewan. I mainly liked the last part! I think the pepper part was really funny! I think you could improve your work by adding full stops and more adjectives. Other than that i thought it was great
Gizem
i agreed with mr.maree, also, i think make more description and ‘Show-me’ words in the end
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A good start Ewan.
I like the idea of you using pepper. The make the beginning part more exciting, I suggest you use powerful verbs.
Mr Maree
Very good Ewan. It was funny when you used the pepper. I suggest you check your spellings and don’t forget capital letter for I!!!!
:]
Ewan you have some good sentence and you need to
use full stops.
Well done Ewan.
I mainly liked the last part! I think the pepper part was really funny!
I think you could improve your work by adding full stops and more adjectives. Other than that i thought it was great
Gizem
i agreed with mr.maree, also, i think make more description and ‘Show-me’
words in the end