I think this is a passionate post and you really belive in yourself.However you have spelt the players name wrong Falcow is spelt Falcao, Zalatan is Zlatan, is Ribiry is Ribery, Van Perci is Van Persie, Roben is Robben
Dear Kameren,
I really enjoyed your writing about your hobby about football. Althogh it had good info I highly recomend you that should of writen what team they’re on.
Its very interesting and your passion is very significent in your life.If your spelling improved it would be perfect.
I think this is a passionate post and you really belive in yourself.However you have spelt the players name wrong Falcow is spelt Falcao, Zalatan is Zlatan, is Ribiry is Ribery, Van Perci is Van Persie, Roben is Robben
Dear kolade
sorry for my spelling it was because I rushed it next time I will take my time and not rush but thanks for they advice
by
Good post about football.
Next time look for spelling mistakes.
Dear Kameren,I liked how you told them about yourself,EBI you wrote in smaller writing and wrote more than just names
From Norbert
Dear: Camren
Your writing is good becouse it has the footballers name so i can understand who your talking about.
Ohhh and even better if u left spaces.
dear kam
i liked your one because you wrote thing about football . I think to improve if you done spelling write.
Dear Kameren,
I really enjoyed your writing about your hobby about football. Althogh it had good info I highly recomend you that should of writen what team they’re on.
Dear Kameren
I like football as well as you.
To improve your writing you could check your spellings
from Hisham.
Dear kameren
you used footballers names
good worck
I like your style of writing.
🙂