I really like your story, Maria-Carla. Its very modern and the end part got me wondering what could the black face be…
WWW- Your used different sentence openers
EBI- Remember to check your sentences and spellings.
E.g. Julian was my best friend I haven’t seen her for a very long till we
saw each other.
www- well done for using a variety of sentence openers to add interest.
ebi – Don’t forget to re-read your work to check for meaning.
I really like your story, Maria-Carla. Its very modern and the end part got me wondering what could the black face be…
WWW- Your used different sentence openers
EBI- Remember to check your sentences and spellings.
E.g. Julian was my best friend I haven’t seen her for a very long till we
saw each other.
In that sentence, you missed out the word time.
Over all, your story is really nice. Agnieszka
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