You described your thoughts and feelings well including how you got ready for the trip. Perhaps you could have written more about the actual Remembrance Ceremony.
The jackets are called ‘High viz’ – short for high visibility and where you stated ‘boost out the skeleton’ – did you mean burst?
Also you may need to change the adverb you used for the sentence with speech. Would the teacher say something about such a sad event ‘happily’?
Good to see you writing on the blog again. Remember to take part in the 100wc weekly.
Dear Valentina,
Thank you, next time I will write words and check if it is spelled correct also describe the main things in the storys thank you again Valentina.
Dear Emre,
You described your thoughts and feelings well including how you got ready for the trip. Perhaps you could have written more about the actual Remembrance Ceremony.
The jackets are called ‘High viz’ – short for high visibility and where you stated ‘boost out the skeleton’ – did you mean burst?
Also you may need to change the adverb you used for the sentence with speech. Would the teacher say something about such a sad event ‘happily’?
Good to see you writing on the blog again. Remember to take part in the 100wc weekly.
All the best with the next blog.
Valentina
Dear Valentina,
Thank you, next time I will write words and check if it is spelled correct also describe the main things in the storys thank you again Valentina.