I really liked the description you used.You could of used punctuation when you wrote’when I have the ball at my feet I feel unstoppable.I feel complete.
I really loved it!!! it was very interesting and descriptive and it was a good amount of work.If you changed the font it would be perfect.The font was to joined up I could not read it sorry.
I really liked when you described yourself when you had the ball.
If it was a story I would like to read the rest of it.
nothing to say that you need to improve
WOW! very descriptive piece of work.
It would of been better if you used a different type of handwriting.
by Robert
thanks and I will change it in my next post
I really liked the description you used.You could of used punctuation when you wrote’when I have the ball at my feet I feel unstoppable.I feel complete.
Thanks I always forget punctuation because I get caught up in my work and forget the little important things.
Great use of ajectives and puntuation.
The font is is hard to read for example the I and the K
I like your sentences because its something you want to do when you grow up but you should write it more clearer so we can understand.
Your right it is something i want to do and I will change it next sorry you had trouble reading it
I really loved it!!! it was very interesting and descriptive and it was a good amount of work.If you changed the font it would be perfect.The font was to joined up I could not read it sorry.
Thanks I will change the font next time
I really liked when you described yourself when you had the ball.
If it was a story I would like to read the rest of it.
nothing to say that you need to improve
Thanks I glad you like it