You included lots of adjectives to describe the setting. Next time vary your sentence openers, you have written the same phrase …there were lots of… Also your opening sentence could be something like … One bright day…, It was a bright day…
Dear Natalia,
It was amazing. Your story is just like Red Ridding Hood Story
In your writing check your spelling. These are the words are that incorrect : Broun, Durk, Spoky, Skaird, Closer.
You have to check your spelling all the time
But your story was excited I really want to know what happened at the end.
Dear Natalia,
You included lots of adjectives to describe the setting. Next time vary your sentence openers, you have written the same phrase …there were lots of… Also your opening sentence could be something like … One bright day…, It was a bright day…
All the best with the next 100WC.
Valentina
Dear Natalia,
It was amazing. Your story is just like Red Ridding Hood Story
In your writing check your spelling. These are the words are that incorrect : Broun, Durk, Spoky, Skaird, Closer.
You have to check your spelling all the time
But your story was excited I really want to know what happened at the end.
Esraxx